Commentary on writing style

Little slow to respond, but I'd just suggest writing your story the way you want to write it.  Everyone's writing style is unique if they have bothered to write enough to "find their voice" in the first place.  That's whats always been great about reading for me.  There is always something new and fresh out there I might just fall in love with, and there's alot out there that obviously means more to others than myself.

Whether its writing or reading, its still an exploration, an adventure that either side can choose to pursue or abandon in favor of another.  You shouldnt worry to much about what others think about your style, there is always going to be someone who doesnt like something, and only too happy to share their "complaints."  The only thing that really matters, is how You feel about it.

Though I haven't actually played your game yet, I will say that it depends on context. Yeah, having characters that swore at any given chance does subtract to the piece. But sometimes having, at least, grown men saying anything other than a swore makes it strange and out of place if it does warrant it. A balance is needed. But sometimes it's just the wording that others might take offense.

Otherwise the excessive use of curse words would just make one sound childish, I agree. So I'd say don't take to heart those who think like that. After I play it I'll give a more accurate wordvomit. Sorry.